When I first started writing the poem about Sangilak, this was the poem I wrote first. However at the time, I was not too comfortable with how it read or the rhythm so I then wrote the other poem, which I submitted.
I have since worked out the wrinkles of this poem, to the point that I am reasonably happy with it, so I give you my other lion creation.
A Shameless Lion
Well now that my feet are on the ground
I have the strangest ‘tail’ to explain, ~ if I may.
All about a Lion, ~ of how he wove his spell –
When he became the hunter and I became the prey.
How he showed up everywhere, relentless his pursuit,
He said “stop!” and I turned, to see what he would say.
“I’m only looking for a home, if you could be so kind.”
Now he’s always by my side, ~ for as long as he will stay.
E.Valentine Jan 26/08 ©
C’ya
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EXCELLENT, THE LION STANDS PROUD!
very nice Eric :)
Thank you Richard, for both your welcome comment and your visit. :)
Hi Newnorth, thank you so much my friend. :)
Wonderful Eric!! :~D Your poetry again brings a broad smile to my face!
I always appreciate a visit from you Leon, complete with your smile my friend. :)
Great,Eric....just great!
I like this one very much!
Margie
Nice to see the spruced up lion poem, Eric!
Very Nice, Eric..!
:)
Eric, I really really really like this one. You rock.
Margie, thank you, I'm so glad you enjoyed that one too. :)
Thank you Julie, it's a little better now. :)
Shades, thank you so much. :)
Hi Zirelda, I think you like it! I say that with a smile.. LOL :)
Have a great day. :)
Every day is beautiful Eric. Sometimes it just depends on how you look at it. :)
Happy day back atcha!
Z...... :))
your poem tells a story .. i wondered who was he :)
Hi Nabeel, thanks for your visit and your comment.
I thought about what you said, point taken.:)
Wow, he is so lucky to have two poems! Nice one. :-)
Thank you Shameless, nice to see you again.. :)
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