Monday, February 11, 2008

A Second Chance

When I first started writing the poem about Sangilak, this was the poem I wrote first. However at the time, I was not too comfortable with how it read or the rhythm so I then wrote the other poem, which I submitted.

I have since worked out the wrinkles of this poem, to the point that I am reasonably happy with it, so I give you my other lion creation.

A Shameless Lion

Well now that my feet are on the ground
I have the strangest ‘tail’ to explain, ~ if I may.
All about a Lion, ~ of how he wove his spell –
When he became the hunter and I became the prey.

How he showed up everywhere, relentless his pursuit,
He said “stop!” and I turned, to see what he would say.
“I’m only looking for a home, if you could be so kind.”
Now he’s always by my side, ~ for as long as he will stay.

E.Valentine Jan 26/08 ©


C’ya

20 comments:

Richard Womack said...

EXCELLENT, THE LION STANDS PROUD!

newnorth said...

very nice Eric :)

Eric Valentine said...

Thank you Richard, for both your welcome comment and your visit. :)

Eric Valentine said...

Hi Newnorth, thank you so much my friend. :)

Leon said...

Wonderful Eric!! :~D Your poetry again brings a broad smile to my face!

Eric Valentine said...

I always appreciate a visit from you Leon, complete with your smile my friend. :)

Margie said...

Great,Eric....just great!
I like this one very much!

Margie

Julie at Virtual Voyage said...

Nice to see the spruced up lion poem, Eric!

shades said...

Very Nice, Eric..!
:)

zirelda said...

Eric, I really really really like this one. You rock.

Eric Valentine said...

Margie, thank you, I'm so glad you enjoyed that one too. :)

Eric Valentine said...

Thank you Julie, it's a little better now. :)

Eric Valentine said...

Shades, thank you so much. :)

Eric Valentine said...

Hi Zirelda, I think you like it! I say that with a smile.. LOL :)

Have a great day. :)

zirelda said...

Every day is beautiful Eric. Sometimes it just depends on how you look at it. :)

Happy day back atcha!

Eric Valentine said...

Z...... :))

Nabeel said...

your poem tells a story .. i wondered who was he :)

Eric Valentine said...

Hi Nabeel, thanks for your visit and your comment.

I thought about what you said, point taken.:)

Shameless said...

Wow, he is so lucky to have two poems! Nice one. :-)

Eric Valentine said...

Thank you Shameless, nice to see you again.. :)